Copyediting Sticky Web Setter Galvantula (Bug) [QC 2/2] [GP 0/1]

[Jópie Trópí]

[SET]
Galvantula @ Focus Sash
Name: Sticky Web (Bug)
Ability: Compound Eyes
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Sticky Web
- Thunder
- Energy Ball
- Hidden Power Ice / Thunder Wave

[SET COMMENTS]
Galvantula serves as an excellent Sticky Web lead for supporting its offensive Bug-type team members with speed control. Thunder, in conjunction with Compound Eyes, is a strong and spammable STAB move that gives Galvantula an offensive presence, taking on opposing hazard setting leads, threatening paralysis and denting Water- and Flying-types. Energy Ball allows Galvantula to threaten bulky Ground-types like Great Tusk, Hippowdon, Swampert, and Gastrodon. Hidden Power Ice deals with Flying- and Dragon-types like Gliscor, the Landorus formes, Garchomp, and Dragonite. Thunder Wave can be used over Hidden Power Ice to paralyze set-up sweepers and fast threats that can't be effectively slowed down with Sticky Web, most notably Dragonite, Galarian-Zapdos, Mega Aerodactyl, opposing Mega Pinsir and Volcarona, without having to rely on Thunder to do so, at the cost of losing coverage against Pokemon that resist both Thunder and Energy Ball. Sticky Web lowers the amount of Quiver Dance boosts needed for Volcarona to outspeed Regieleki, Unburden Sneasler and Sand Rush Excadrill, making setups more efficient. Choice Scarf users Kleavor and Buzzwole will also outspeed those Pokemon, limiting the amount of revenge kill options against them and improving their effectiveness against Fire- and Rock-types by taking care of Choice Scarf Blacephalon, Hisuian Arcanine, and Iron Boulder. Sticky Web also gives Mega Pinsir more opportunities to use Return instead of Quick Attack to increase its damage output or Earthquake to KO Pokemon that would usually threaten it, like Choice Scarf Nihilego and Hisuian Arcanine. Scizor can OHKO or force Diancie out before it can Mega Evolve to allow Galvantula to set up Sticky Web against Fairy- and Rock-teams.

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[Jópie Trópí]

QC ready! (I hope I'm doing this right...)

 

[CaptainDaimyo]

Neko can I amqc this?
yes (for real this time ;w;)

 

[CaptainDaimyo]

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Galvantula

Galvantula serves as an excellent Sticky Web lead for supporting its offensive Bug-type team members with speed control. Its speed and immediate firepower in Thunder gives it an offensive presence after it has set up Webs, and allows it to take on opposing hazard setting leads and weaken opposing Pokemon for its teammates to finish off.
Thunder is Galvantula's most spammable move, with reliable accuracy thanks to Compound Eyes, great firepower and the potential to paralyse on hit. Thunder dents most Water- and Flying-Types, and can even 2HKO Toxapex and Galarian Moltres. (Fix the spacing, and i feel you can merge these ideas into one sentence into smthing like thunder in conjunction with compound eyes makes it spammable STAB taking on opposing hazard setters and then waters and flyings)
Energy ball allows Galvantula to hit bulky Ground-types like Great Tusk, Hippowdon and Ursaluna (Not really a great mention, you can mention the water/grounds here instead) hard, and improves its already great matchup against Water-type teams by shredding Water / Ground type Pokemon like Gastrodon and Swampert (check earlier comment)
Hidden Power Ice deals super effective damage against Flying-types that resist Thunder, like Dragonite, Thundurus-T and Zapdos, allowing Galvantula to take on Flying-type teams and Ground-Type Pokemon that Bug-type teams often struggle with, such as Garchomp, Gliscor and Landorus. (Rephrase this entire sentence since theres some repetitiveness here, mention how HP Ice takes on Flyings [move gliscor and lando to the flying mentions], then mention dragon-types by mobing drag with garchomp)
Thunder Wave can be used in favour of over Hidden Power Ice to paralyze set-up sweepers and fast threats that can't be effectively slowed down with Sticky Web (mention examples), without having to rely on Thunder to do so, at the cost of losing coverage against Ground- and Flying-Type teams. (I would rephrase this since it seems a bit misleading, since new players could seem confused by how not running hp ice loses coverage against those types if galvantula runs thunder and eball)

You are also missing mentions of teammates for galvantula, so mention around 4-5

 

[Neko]

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Galvantula

Galvantula serves as an excellent Sticky Web lead for supporting its offensive Bug-type team members with speed control. Its speed and immediate firepower in Thunder gives it an offensive presence after it has set up Webs, and allows it to take on opposing hazard setting leads and weaken opposing Pokemon for its teammates to finish off.
Thunder is Galvantula's most spammable move, with reliable accuracy thanks to Compound Eyes, great firepower and the potential to paralyse on hit. Thunder dents most Water- and Flying-Types, and can even 2HKO Toxapex and Galarian Moltres. (Fix the spacing, and i feel you can merge these ideas into one sentence into smthing like thunder in conjunction with compound eyes makes it spammable STAB taking on opposing hazard setters and then waters and flyings)
Energy ball allows Galvantula to hit bulky Ground-types like Great Tusk, Hippowdon and Ursaluna (Not really a great mention, you can mention the water/grounds here instead) hard, and improves its already great matchup against Water-type teams by shredding Water / Ground type Pokemon like Gastrodon and Swampert (check earlier comment)
Hidden Power Ice deals super effective damage against Flying-types that resist Thunder, like Dragonite, Thundurus-T and Zapdos, allowing Galvantula to take on Flying-type teams and Ground-Type Pokemon that Bug-type teams often struggle with, such as Garchomp, Gliscor and Landorus. (Rephrase this entire sentence since theres some repetitiveness here, mention how HP Ice takes on Flyings [move gliscor and lando to the flying mentions], then mention dragon-types by mobing drag with garchomp)
Thunder Wave can be used in favour of over Hidden Power Ice to paralyze set-up sweepers and fast threats that can't be effectively slowed down with Sticky Web (mention examples), without having to rely on Thunder to do so, at the cost of losing coverage against Ground- and Flying-Type teams. (I would rephrase this since it seems a bit misleading, since new players could seem confused by how not running hp ice loses coverage against those types if galvantula runs thunder and eball)

You are also missing mentions of teammates for galvantula, so mention around 4-5

Jópie Trópí implement this check pls

 

[Jópie Trópí]

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Galvantula

Galvantula serves as an excellent Sticky Web lead for supporting its offensive Bug-type team members with speed control. Its speed and immediate firepower in Thunder gives it an offensive presence after it has set up Webs, and allows it to take on opposing hazard setting leads and weaken opposing Pokemon for its teammates to finish off.
Thunder is Galvantula's most spammable move, with reliable accuracy thanks to Compound Eyes, great firepower and the potential to paralyse on hit. Thunder dents most Water- and Flying-Types, and can even 2HKO Toxapex and Galarian Moltres. (Fix the spacing, and i feel you can merge these ideas into one sentence into smthing like thunder in conjunction with compound eyes makes it spammable STAB taking on opposing hazard setters and then waters and flyings)
Energy ball allows Galvantula to hit bulky Ground-types like Great Tusk, Hippowdon and Ursaluna (Not really a great mention, you can mention the water/grounds here instead) hard, and improves its already great matchup against Water-type teams by shredding Water / Ground type Pokemon like Gastrodon and Swampert (check earlier comment)
Hidden Power Ice deals super effective damage against Flying-types that resist Thunder, like Dragonite, Thundurus-T and Zapdos, allowing Galvantula to take on Flying-type teams and Ground-Type Pokemon that Bug-type teams often struggle with, such as Garchomp, Gliscor and Landorus. (Rephrase this entire sentence since theres some repetitiveness here, mention how HP Ice takes on Flyings [move gliscor and lando to the flying mentions], then mention dragon-types by mobing drag with garchomp)
Thunder Wave can be used in favour of over Hidden Power Ice to paralyze set-up sweepers and fast threats that can't be effectively slowed down with Sticky Web (mention examples), without having to rely on Thunder to do so, at the cost of losing coverage against Ground- and Flying-Type teams. (I would rephrase this since it seems a bit misleading, since new players could seem confused by how not running hp ice loses coverage against those types if galvantula runs thunder and eball)

You are also missing mentions of teammates for galvantula, so mention around 4-5

Jópie Trópí implement this check pls

I apologize for the wait.
QC1 has been implemented.

 

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QC 2/2

[SET]
Galvantula @ Focus Sash
Name: Sticky Web (Bug)
Ability: Compound Eyes
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Sticky Web
- Thunder
- Energy Ball
- Hidden Power Ice / Thunder Wave

[SET COMMENTS]
Galvantula serves as an excellent Sticky Web lead for supporting its offensive Bug-type team members with speed control. Thunder, in conjunction with Compound Eyes, is a strong and spammable STAB move that gives Galvantula an offensive presence, taking on opposing hazard setting leads, threatening paralysis and denting Water- and Flying-types. [Back space so the paragraphs is connected.] Energy Ball allows Galvantula to threaten hit bulky Ground-types like Great Tusk, Hippowdon, Swampert, and Gastrodon hard. Hidden Power Ice deals with Flying- and Dragon-types like Gliscor, the Landorus formes, Garchomp, and Dragonite. super effective damage against Thunder resistant Flying-types, like Thundurus-T, Zapdos, Gliscor and Landorus, and Dragon-types such as Garchomp and Dragonite. [Just kinda re worded it a little bit. most of the mons you mention either just take neutral damage or just flat out is immune to Thunder.] Thunder Wave can be used over Hidden Power Ice to paralyze set-up sweepers and fast threats that can't be effectively slowed down with Sticky Web, most notably Dragonite, Galarian-Zapdos, Mega Aerodactyl, Serperior and opposing Mega Pinsir, and Volcarona;, without having to rely on Thunder to do so, at the cost of losing coverage against Pokemon that resist both Thunder and Energy Ball. Sticky Web lowers the amount of Quiver Dance boosts needed for Volcarona to outspeed Regieleki, Unburden Sneasler and Sand Rush Excadrill, making setups more efficient. Choice Scarf users Kleavor and Buzzwole will also outspeed those Pokemon, limiting the amount of revenge kill options against them and improving their effectiveness against Fire- and Rock-types by taking care of Choice Scarf Blacephalon, Hisuian Arcanine, and Iron Boulder. Sticky Web also gives Mega Pinsir more opportunities to use Return instead of Quick Attack to increase its damage output or Earthquake to KO Pokemon that would usually threaten it, like Choice Scarf Nihilego and Hisuian Hisuan Arcanine. Scizor can OHKO or force Diancie out before it can Mega Evolve to allow Galvantula to set up Sticky Web against Fairy- and Rock-teamstypes.

[CREDITS]
Written by:
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Quality checked by:
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QC 2/2 Great Writing!

 

[Mateeus]

Jópie Trópí put the QC number in the thread title

 

[Jópie Trópí]

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QC 2/2

[SET]
Galvantula @ Focus Sash
Name: Sticky Web (Bug)
Ability: Compound Eyes
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Sticky Web
- Thunder
- Energy Ball
- Hidden Power Ice / Thunder Wave

[SET COMMENTS]
Galvantula serves as an excellent Sticky Web lead for supporting its offensive Bug-type team members with speed control. Thunder, in conjunction with Compound Eyes, is a strong and spammable STAB move that gives Galvantula an offensive presence, taking on opposing hazard setting leads, threatening paralysis and denting Water- and Flying-types. [Back space so the paragraphs is connected.] Energy Ball allows Galvantula to threaten hit bulky Ground-types like Great Tusk, Hippowdon, Swampert, and Gastrodon hard. Hidden Power Ice deals with Flying- and Dragon-types like Gliscor, the Landorus formes, Garchomp, and Dragonite. super effective damage against Thunder resistant Flying-types, like Thundurus-T, Zapdos, Gliscor and Landorus, and Dragon-types such as Garchomp and Dragonite. [Just kinda re worded it a little bit. most of the mons you mention either just take neutral damage or just flat out is immune to Thunder.] Thunder Wave can be used over Hidden Power Ice to paralyze set-up sweepers and fast threats that can't be effectively slowed down with Sticky Web, most notably Dragonite, Galarian-Zapdos, Mega Aerodactyl, Serperior and opposing Mega Pinsir, and Volcarona;, without having to rely on Thunder to do so, at the cost of losing coverage against Pokemon that resist both Thunder and Energy Ball. Sticky Web lowers the amount of Quiver Dance boosts needed for Volcarona to outspeed Regieleki, Unburden Sneasler and Sand Rush Excadrill, making setups more efficient. Choice Scarf users Kleavor and Buzzwole will also outspeed those Pokemon, limiting the amount of revenge kill options against them and improving their effectiveness against Fire- and Rock-types by taking care of Choice Scarf Blacephalon, Hisuian Arcanine, and Iron Boulder. Sticky Web also gives Mega Pinsir more opportunities to use Return instead of Quick Attack to increase its damage output or Earthquake to KO Pokemon that would usually threaten it, like Choice Scarf Nihilego and Hisuian Hisuan Arcanine. Scizor can OHKO or force Diancie out before it can Mega Evolve to allow Galvantula to set up Sticky Web against Fairy- and Rock-teamstypes.

[CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/jópie-trópí.670267/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/captaindaimyo.602431/
QC2 URL
Grammar checked by:
GP1 URL

QC 2/2 Great Writing!

Thank you. QC 2 has been Implemented.

Jópie Trópí put the QC number in the thread title

Sorry about that, I've added the QC number to the thread title.

 

[boomp]

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